Thursday
18/10/2018
12:18 pm
There was a robbery on Monday at Whetu Nps in the whare pukapuka at 4:27.
The robber stole and ate half our chocolate's spilled some coffee left there glasses actually might not be there's tho and there was a shoe left there as well so if you see a female running around with one shoe and no glasses with apparently no hair and cut's on there hand please contact Danielle sowden@ngatea primaryschool.nz have a nice day.
Hmmm, I think you might need to do a little bit of rewriting, Liam. Your blog post is a little confusing to read. Remember that because it is a Police release it would be written using formal language and facts - so we probably wouldn't say anything about the glasses because we didn't know for certain if they were involved in the crime.
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